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ch.3, pg.122: “The Triumvirate: Secret Masterminds” version b
This will take a little explanation:)
First, meet the Triumvirate. You only got a brief glimpse of them before at the start of the chapter.
Second, yes, the dialogue is missing. TB and I can’t decide between two different versions so I will post them below for you to vote on. Whichever is gets the majority of votes will get to be the official dialogue.
The reason behind the indecision is the cadence and method of rhyme for the three witches of the Triumvirate. Without giving too much away, they have a kind of curse that forces them to rhyme with each other in a set of three verses. Some may like the ABAB rhythm better and some may like the other version better. Only one way to find out, so please read and vote on either Option 1 or Option 2. If you are wondering about the unseen witch’s dialogue, that is for the next strip. No peeking! :)
Option 1
Witch #3: “As expected, the mongrel’s failed; but our plan is not expelled. His body unbent yet mind frailed, and our foes unrepelled.”
Witch #2: “For his sloppy job he’ll find his own death knelled! Bah, Dorothy without a scratch! Her little dog, too, was not felled. We must dispense a revenge to match.”
Option 2
Witch #3: “Blast the mongrel, more of a near-sighted scoundrel, always gnawing a single bone at a time.”
Witch #2: “Dorothy leaves without a scratch. Her little dog, too, no match! It’s an outrage; a crime!”
And there you have it. Vote away! More explanations to come next strip but for now, ponder on who these guys are.
Hmm… Choosing is difficult.
I do like the rhyming of Option 1, but Option 2 has the time/crime rhyme linking them together…
I’m going to think about this.
In my optinion, Option 1 rhymes better (especially within one witch’s dialogue) but I do like how Option 2 has a bit of rhyming in their own dialogue, but the last word rhyming with both (and I assume all three). I do like the connection that causes.
Still thinking.
(And if only I was good enough with rhyme to have this rhyming :P)
Yep , really hard to decide:
I was about to go with the AAB CCB (DDB) of Option 2, when I realized that Option 1 is probably more than a simple ABAB: It’s already ABAB BCBC. If this is supposed to be continued this way i.e. CDCD DEDE EFEF …, that’s even better.
Thus I ended up with an opinion that depends:
I vote for Option 1 provided that my assumptions are met.
Otherwise I vote for Option 2 whether or not Seros’ assumptions are met.
To answer, the cadence for Option 1 would be: ABAB BCBC CDCD DEDE and so on. The cadence for Option 2 would be: AAB CCB DDB and then would start over with AAB CCB DDB but a new set of end rhyming words.
Are these the witches of the story including Dorothy’s Wicked Witch of the West ?
Also, interesting choices, I think Option one would fit the story epic tale. However, option two is more simple.
I’m going with option 1.
Option 1. Sounds cooler.
I originally liked Option 2 better because I thought it allowed the characters’ individuality to show through better because, tho they are connected they are also separate individuals.
Now I am on the fence. The cadence is nice but will it get annoying? Dunno.
Marcus> And yes that is the WWW:) Among other personages…
I like Option 2. The AAB cadence feels more conversational, and I think the stricter rhyme scheme of Option 1’s ABAB both kind of pulls out of the dialogue flow and may prove too limiting to write within down the line.